View Full Version : Shine's Poetry Shrine

09-17-2002, 02:12 PM
I haven't written anything in awhile, im mainly focusing on other stuff. But i want to start another little poem thing so... here it is. Im a bit rusty, but still be brutaly honest about them.

A Moment in Autumn

On a bench in the park
you sit amoungest the falling leaves
in this moment in autumn

Final songs ring through the hallow trees.
I gaze into your eyes
and here,
I lose myself

Wedding bells sound around us.
The land shining under a blanket of snow
in this moment in winter

A soft piano plays in our minds
and I awake beside you
in this moment in spring

Her first laugh echo in our thoughts.
Jovana is born
in this moment in summer

Reality sets in.
A leaf flutters between us
A single sweet kiss to begin our happiness
all in a moment in autumn

09-17-2002, 06:18 PM
Go cuz! That poem (I almost spelled porn^^) Is so.....beautiful......Finally you write something happy!

09-17-2002, 11:24 PM
Wow, you've totally suprised me with that one! It's so much different than your other poems, but it's still extremely awesome! You can totally tell that you've got 'wicked' talet, being able to write such beautiful 'uppy' poems, but also some very well written, deep, 'darker' poems. You rock ^_^ *huggles*

09-18-2002, 11:43 AM
great poem, i love the way you refered to the different seasons :)

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09-18-2002, 02:11 PM
*nods* I can see I'll be coming back to this thread a lot to give my opinion on your awesome poetry. Great job, you've got great talent. And this is an excellent poem to kick it all off. Good job.

09-18-2002, 02:11 PM
Oh geez! Thank you all so much! I never really wrote anything happy till now. This is my first, and i really like it so ima write like that more often. Here's another. I was inspired to wite this when i was listening to Rock the Boat by Aaliya. it's all about finally finding happiness after hardships.


White sand
crystal water
perfect shade
and you...

You found me
hidden in shade
bound by steel
free for blurr

I found you
in green fire
pierced by glare
filled by night

Painful thoughts
but now we're here
warm and sweet
emerald blades

We sink beneath
but light flares through
glowing webs
faraway spectres

Our souls rise
and float in place
graceful moves
dancing zephyrs

Mermaid's eyes
Siren's voice
so here we are,
in paradise

09-19-2002, 06:20 PM
Wow mitch! That was beatuiful, a masterpiece, spectacular. And yea. Very nice.

09-20-2002, 02:10 PM
Thank you, and don't call me mitch... ever again.

09-23-2002, 06:29 PM
I know im double posting, but I must put my new poem on! Plz spare me!!

Ok, this one is about not being able to express how you feel. Ummmm.... don't know if it's happy or not. That's just a warning to people who think painful poems are annoying.


As warm as the sun
and deep as the sea
a secret passion to sweet too know
so let's pull over the nightshade
bury it under darkness

Over shades
the lovestruck stare
but to complex to understand
so let's pull over the nightshade
bury it under darkness

A feeling like no other
to grasp it and hold on
but change will anger the present
so let's pull over the nightshade
bury it under darkness

The moon is all-knowing
pressed with silence
glazed with lies
truth does not pierce the shadow
so let's pull over the nightshade
bury it under darkness

10-05-2002, 12:36 PM
ummmmmm....well, I think that this is COULD be better, the other ones are better. I think you put in the name of the poem in too much (even though that's what you have to do thoug). otherwise it is great! keep up the good work!
(my bad grammar is only b/c I want to go back to sleep. I'm really not one of those poeple who go
I aint never goin back to school)

10-09-2002, 06:26 PM
C'mon guys! Post up! What, you all don't like me?! Your right, i am spose to do that. Thank you though.

This one is... well... emotion set to a story. Im flying, going higher and higher, and it goes from noon to dusk to midnight. I think y'all will like it.

I'm Flying...

My soul plows through the clouds
a trail of pale
circling around the azure height

My sun-kissed fingers trace the silver lining
uncover the shine
the next sadness for the world below

My spirit rises over the pink and orange swirls
half hidden a red sphere
the dark rainbow just starting to lay them to sleep

My heart feels for those who's gold ends around here
softly specked with many graves
this "above" world free from sin

My mind torments the silent up-roar sealed within
sparkling higher
i can almost touch the angels

With wings i soar below the star-crested void
seeing the prayed upon silver sliver
those graves closer reveiling dazzling tears

10-11-2002, 04:32 PM
Wow! That was really beautiful! It was hard to understand though. But you used really pretty words. It's an overall nice poem!