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ice!~neko
03-25-2002, 04:48 AM
i wrote this poem for someone i know, its nameless:

I知 sorry,
Sorry I couldn稚 be there for you, when you needed it most.
I知 sorry for all the suffering you went through.
I知 sorry for not understanding.
If only I knew sooner, I could have helped.
Brought you out of this darkness.

--

In this dismal world we live in,
A place so black and cold,
I see a girl, so beautiful,
Her heart as good as gold.
Standing there, but no one cares
Lost in this empty place.
Her glowing body, her gentle lips,
Her sweet, and innocent face.
But beneath her fa軋de, a young girl cries,
And drops a gentle tear.
Shouting out, into the world,
But sadly no one hears.

And I do pray, that one day,
The world will find a way,
To open up,
And see that life,
Is just another way.

chihuadog
03-25-2002, 10:32 AM
The first one is okay. It's good, but it's only mediocre good. The second one is way better, imo. I think it sounds better, and I like the choice of words. Well done.

ice!~neko
03-25-2002, 02:08 PM
its all one poem... i wrote it for somone so its hard to understand why they are connected =\

SSJ
03-25-2002, 02:17 PM
Those are good. Good poetry, well done, nice words.

Anima Relic
03-25-2002, 03:52 PM
not bad neko. Two very enthusiastic thumbs up, fine holiday fun :)

Zachary
03-30-2002, 10:26 AM
Thats a great poem. Its very well done.

Ishtar
04-10-2002, 07:59 PM
timmay... that's so damn sad... and the strange part is i know what it's about...

Zachary
04-18-2002, 10:56 AM
Very Very sad. My mom likes poems i'll tell her this one.

christopher
04-18-2002, 02:25 PM
Very good!! I rilly like the words you use in your poem(s), They made it flow rilly well!